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Bob. An Epic. by ~edzull:iconedzull:

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Author's Comments

Here it is... my ode to monotony...
This is pretty long... took me a few weeks on and off. Worth the effort I think...
Enjoy!

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-01-31

=edzull introduces us to Bob in This Epic and cleverly takes us through his day, manipulating language to replicate his mundane life in a way that keeps you reading. (Suggested by ~Saint-Nightmare and Featured by `imperfect)

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~Chuuurls Jun 19, 2005, 10:25:29 AM
I applaud it.

In the end everyone is simply a statistic. How sad.
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~Ghavrel Jun 19, 2005, 10:30:10 AM
The term "dark" comes to mind. Rather depressing. Did he live in Arizona? It sounded dry, for some reason. Like Arizona. Okay, stream of consciousness stops...
now.

The style is refreshing, although somewhat odd. A few things are unclear, such as the line "The Christian Smith," but perhaps it was meant to be ambiguous, or I may just be missing the point.

The story is good; the grammar and punctuation are almost perfect, except for one slip at the end with a period outside of the quotations.

...sorry, English freak speaking.

To wit: it was good.

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~edzull Jun 19, 2005, 10:32:54 AM
Oops, I'll fix that right now...
The Christian Smith bit is becuase a person's "Christian name" is their first name. So Bob is to first names what Smith is to last names...
Thanks for the help.

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The next best thing to a time machine...
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~Ghavrel Jun 19, 2005, 11:38:17 AM
I see. Now it make much more sense. ^_^

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~anarchy-chicken Jun 19, 2005, 3:48:00 PM
I LOVE THIS! THAT END CAUGHT ME SO BY SUPRISE! I WA LIKE "Whoa!" SO TOTALLY FAVED!

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98% of all teenagers are bad at math. If you're one of the 5% who are good at it, paste this into your signature.
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~ShadowedByTheLight Jun 19, 2005, 5:53:34 PM
*drools*

So... very good... I love your writing... :D

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Anyone who thinks sunshine is pure happiness has never danced in the rain.
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Life's like an hourglass glued to the table.
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~Blindmanswolf Jun 19, 2005, 9:23:52 PM
you were write about long, but it wasn't too long, I loved it, the end completly caught me off guard. I give it 2 thumbs up
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~Yetizor Jun 20, 2005, 4:02:07 AM
o...m...g.

Thats awsome....and sorrowful....

awsome work edz!

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Dead Account
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~Joshrb2004 Jun 24, 2005, 4:12:46 PM
This left me speechless for quite a bit, cause it has me wanting me to say too much at once.

The part I like the most is:
One plus one plus one…
Times thirty-eight…
Divided by whatever…
Minus who cares…

Just something about how it goes by routine, then just wanders off not caring anymore. Which I get a feeling of through this mostly, except when he meets Kimberly. Great peom/story, I really enjoy it, because it's different :-)
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