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Daily DeviationGiven 2006-01-31=edzull introduces us to Bob in This Epic and cleverly takes us through his day, manipulating language to replicate his mundane life in a way that keeps you reading. (Suggested by ~Saint-Nightmare and Featured by `imperfect) |
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June 19, 2005
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In the end everyone is simply a statistic. How sad.
now.
The style is refreshing, although somewhat odd. A few things are unclear, such as the line "The Christian Smith," but perhaps it was meant to be ambiguous, or I may just be missing the point.
The story is good; the grammar and punctuation are almost perfect, except for one slip at the end with a period outside of the quotations.
...sorry, English freak speaking.
To wit: it was good.
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The Christian Smith bit is becuase a person's "Christian name" is their first name. So Bob is to first names what Smith is to last names...
Thanks for the help.
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The next best thing to a time machine...
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98% of all teenagers are bad at math. If you're one of the 5% who are good at it, paste this into your signature.
So... very good... I love your writing...
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Anyone who thinks sunshine is pure happiness has never danced in the rain.
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Life's like an hourglass glued to the table.
Thats awsome....and sorrowful....
awsome work edz!
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Dead Account
The part I like the most is:
One plus one plus one…
Times thirty-eight…
Divided by whatever…
Minus who cares…
Just something about how it goes by routine, then just wanders off not caring anymore. Which I get a feeling of through this mostly, except when he meets Kimberly. Great peom/story, I really enjoy it, because it's different
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